Twirling Star

there's some truth to what he says, but i think it needs to be emphasized how amazing this song is. Which  alongside Bibby's critique suggest some amazing potential, i mean now that you've made this imagine all the best parts of the song happening closer to each other and with smoother transition, which of course is the hardest part of combining two slightly related melodies accounting for the change in rythm and all. But as it is now it's still amazing.

I never thought I'd say this, but I think you need to tone down the craziness a little. You obviously put a lot of work into this, but it's so fast paced and unpredictable that it almost sounds like the notes are placed randomly, and that's hardly ever a good thing. Maybe I'm just not your prime demographic or something, but this song is slightly hard to listen to at parts (though most of it is awesome).