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what lies before me

By ShintarouMusic on Dec 29, 2013 4:53 am

Here's a track from my upcoming EP. Enjoy!
It's 2x lsdj and a Numark x6

This submission is licensed by author under CC Attribution Noncommercial No Derivative Works (BY-NC-ND)

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This is really good.  You must have put a lot of time into this.  It really shows.

The opening feels really grand yikes  Echo-y, the repeating pulse wave harmonies, and the gradual building in layers and complexity.  It varies a good amount and kept my interest while still feeling unified because primarily because of those pulse wave harmonies I believe.
And then it transitions about 2 minutes in with the introduction of that "dirty wave" motif that sounds REALLY cool big_smile  It sounds like there's some octave modulation in it or something, I can't really tell but, the rhythmic affect is so cool, I love it, and when it goes into the harmonic progression that is very happy sounding and it's just beautiful :'D  I really love how you transition and develop things, so seamlessly and effectively.  Then there's the really rhythmically sophisticated mono-harmonic part starting around 3 that makes me think of like dubstep drops.  It's very awesome, there's rhyme in the rhythm and it's like poetry with sound effects, and, DUDE, after 4 minutes it's so creative XD   And nice that it drops out all pitched sounds so that it can come back in with the repeating pulse wave harmonies from the intro again!  Such a wonderful way to bring the listener back into the groove.  The structure is wonderfully done!  As it nears the end, I just love the extended harmonies, and the same kind of effect from the beginning where it sounds really grand.  And there's also that rhythmic bass I talked about before that I really like!

This is an amazing piece, I must say I didn't think I would actually listen to the whole thing because of how long it is, especially since I almost never listen to entire tracks even when they're shorter, but ... wow it was really worth it, this IS a really nice piece. 

I can't really thing of many suggestions really XD  I guess the down-sweeping resonance at the end felt a little out of place.  It sounds cool, but maybe it's a bit strong?  I don't know.  A very minor thing really.

Hmm another thing.. is I guess the middle range feels a little hollow for me throughout most of the piece... but I don't really know if there's anything you can do about it without interfering with everything else, because there is so much already in the rhythmic texture.  Maybe just a single non-rhythmic voice?  I think I mainly feel this way because of after 2:34 when there's the high pitched melody coming in, it feels like it lacks impact because it's so thin and separated in pitch from most of the rest of the harmonic texture.  Maybe if it just had some simple harmonies, I don't really know, I guess they're just things to try XD

Anyway, I REALLY like this track, GREAT job, SERIOUSLY ^-^

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