- : repetitive and kinda generic chiptune sound too it.

+:  it has a solid feel and flows well.

thats really helpful,

yeah i kinda felt it got a little repetitive :S

You have comments and a track posted on another site. Isn't 28 comments there enough for you?

15 of those comments are from the OP ><

It's a pretty solid tune, the only problem I have with it is that it starts to turn stagnant. It feels as if you could have done a lot more with the second part but chose not to. Your ending was great tho, definitely shows you have some skills.
nice work

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Reopened post in new forum "Constructive Criticism"

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is hurr: http://chipmusic.org/syntheticaesthetics/music/hikari

and for those who dont want to go to 8bc its also on my myspace: http://www.myspace.com/syntheticaestheticsmusic

thankss

edit: i would like some tips on how to improve plzzz