Sorry for the double post, but...
I went away and had played around with some sounds and made another track! I feel that the leads and bass could probably be a bit more interesting, but I experimented with commands a bit more. I had a look at some .sav files and got some ideas, I'm still a bit hesitant to use them because I don't want to over use them, if that makes sense... :S
Anyway, here is the track, it would be great if you could give it a listen and leave some thoughts/see if I'm on the right track. Thanks!
https://soundcloud.com/the_user5/lame-ent

Thanks Dr. Jaffle! I wouldn't say that at all, but thank you regardless
Hmmmm chairs... I see... *looks off into the distance thoughtfully*

Probably better than anything I've ever made. HAHA \(^_^)/

I also agree with using tables (and sometimes chairs).

Thank you very much defiantsystem, will do

I don't have any real criticism. Everyone has said what I was thinking but I wanted to say keep at it because it sounds like you have great potential.

I didn't think it was good enough to be scary but thank you very much!

This is scary, the potential in your  "my first lsdj". ...

Alright, I'll see if I can find his stuff. Good to know there are other people around!
haha off topic, yet still useful

he's a sydney chipbro who moved away a while ago.
sorry, was a super OT remark haha

It's the place to be ahaha
Gentle Hurst?

tassie! say hello to gentle hurst :>

Thanks a lot guys! Yeah, I'll stick at the sound design, and hopefully get there eventually!

These are really good for beginner tracks. It's already been said, you gotta work on sound design a bit more but that's just figuring out how to use LSDJ. It's obvious you know how to write good melodies and music, so spend more time figuring out how to make interesting sounds and instruments with the program. Good job!

Hey, I want to say here is only they are very nice track keep it up. Also one more thing if you can use the soundcloud automator so, you will get more audience and follower at present.

Just want to second what KK Slider said. Tables will be your best friend when it comes to really adding life to your instruments. Maybe just spend some time getting comfortable with the effect commands, layering them in tables, and maybe even diving into automation in tables - allowing the instrumenta to start writing the track for you. Once youre comfortable with tables and pulse and noi channels, you can dive into the endless void of greatness that is the wav channel. Whatever you do, learn to love tables, they will bring shit to life. I