I would like some constructive criticism for this track. I don't know what it is, as it's random sounds slapped together. It's my first track so please be aware the song may be subpar (but that's ok since I'm here to improve). I don't know what I was going for with this, as it was always hard for me to start. So here it is. So you know, I am interested in improving the track and myself, this is my first step. Feel free to be honest and straight-forward.

http://beepbox.co/#5s0kbl00e0ft9a7g0fj7 … OflmQQAg00

One day I hope to be as good as Tim Follin. I apologize if this is too vague for you (I did read the top thread), I just can't really assign a genre to this. I would also like what process/tools you use to make chiptunes though, as I do intend to branch out from this. Thank you.