I like the idea, just needs some polishing...and more parts/changes. Kicks were a bit 'bloopy' for my taste as well. Other than that, good start. Keep at it.

Edit: Also, check this guy out, http://chipmusic.org/nationalbroadcastnetwork

Thanks, over time i think we can improve and get better and better.

That's it, man.
Making a tune after tune really helps. Just listen to my first track i ever uploaded to my soundcloud and then compare it to the latest.
Time + Training makes Sucess.

Thanks, over time i think we can improve and get better and better.

I don't really dig it.
Of course i love the style you are going for, but for me it dosn't did the trick.
I guess your aiming for a style kinda like this, right?
http://soundcloud.com/sternfuckingzeit/intorow

You should settle back a little and make some more before actually dropping some Tunes in the crowd. Sometimes you have to make some (or a lot) of trash before you can really definie your style and make some good tunes, that also get great feedback.
Make some more, but don't really show it. Let me quote something for you:

Blockhead wrote:

I will say this, it is far to early for an artist like this to be putting your music out into the ether. It is not ready. He is not ready. Keep working at it and see what happens but putting out stuff like this not gonna help anyone in the long run..He needs to plug away and refine his skills. [,,,]
Making music is a process of working from the ground up. Just cause you have recording equipment, a beat and a rhyme doesn’t mean it’s ready for prime time. I’m not saying this to be mean..but really I’m saying it to all bedroom producers out there starting out. You should be a AT LEAST a year deep before you let anyone outside you immediate circle hear your music. Trust me.

That are true words, he speaks.
But who am i to judge, i just a slacker myself with shitty music.

I will say this, it is far to early for an artist like this to be putting your music out into the ether. It is not ready. He is not ready. Keep working at it and see what happens but putting out stuff like this not gonna help anyone in the long run..He needs to plug away and refine his skills. [,,,]
Making music is a process of working from the ground up. Just cause you have recording equipment, a beat and a rhyme doesn’t mean it’s ready for prime time. I’m not saying this to be mean..but really I’m saying it to all bedroom producers out there starting out. You should be a AT LEAST a year deep before you let anyone outside you immediate circle hear your music. Trust me.

And guturals and pigsqueals, dont forget the breakdown.

it needs to sound more trashy and deliberate