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Viridity

Viridity

By Dissimulation on Feb 4, 2020 1:53 am

This submission is licensed by author under CC Attribution Noncommercial No Derivative Works (BY-NC-ND)

Member has requested constructive criticism

It has some very nice elements, including a good handle on legato bends. It could use a little distinction between the melody and counterpoint. The sounds overall would benefit from more variation in tone. Obviously like all music of this sort there are limitations but there are many ways to get more distinct timbres. There is a moment of obvious hard panning at the end which felt a little random. More use of light panning throughout would also be a good benefit. There is a little strange harmonic dissonance in some of the counter-point that sounded a little jarring to me but overall it was pretty good, but that can be racked up to a matter of tastes.

Despite my criticisms I generally liked the piece! (First one I listened to on the site honestly, I just found this place!) If I didn't like it I probably wouldn't take the time to write all this. The melodic elements are very soothing and most of the harmonies feel very organic. My advice would be to take a little time to think about how you could make it better, revisit these elements, don't take too much time worring about it, and finally keep composing!

-ShemS

cc: It will be better with a distinct melody (IMHO)

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