Mainly on the voice on this one (it's also a bit offbeat on some places, I'll fix that), and the chorus effect I added after the build-up, not sure what I think about either of these.
Mainly not sure about the voice really fitting in, and if the chorus goes away from the chiptune theme too much.
(And composition wise, it's obviously not done, so ignore the ending 
)
https://clyp.it/qmtljrdc
1 Nov 14, 2017 11:21 pm
Topic: New song again - Need criticism (0 replies, posted in Constructive Criticism)
2 Nov 11, 2017 12:53 pm
Re: Need criticism on a song (made in LMMS) (3 replies, posted in Constructive Criticism)
NattyIce wrote:
I like your sound selection, but I would have to agree with your sentiment that it's too repetitive. I think what contributes to that is there's always an arp going in the background, and then the main melody never changes much (or if it did it was hard to tell). I think you could get away from the repetitiveness with a couple breakdowns, a change in main melody/instrument, or just making the song shorter. Of course this all depends on what you're going for with the song. What did you use to make this?
Thanks for the reply!
I used LMMS, as I said in the title... But anyway.
I'll try those things out! I did change it slightly in the section after the build up, but it is hard to notice. I'll try to change it though by maybe slowing the melody down slightly in sections or doing some other changes to it like you suggested.
3 Nov 10, 2017 2:35 pm
Topic: Need criticism on a song (made in LMMS) (3 replies, posted in Constructive Criticism)
So I finally decided to get back into chiptune music, and I've made this song which I need constructive criticism on.
https://clyp.it/p2unooxb
Main point I need opinions on:
General structure of the song
Sounds used
I think it's too repetetive, but I'm not sure what I can do to change that
And anything else you can think of.
(Inb4 that person who said in the pinned post no one would read it ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°))