square0ne wrote:I no longer need any criticism anymore thank you for all of those who contributed
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In hopes that you weren't completely trolled off of cm.o I'll post this anyways.
I wanted to post some CC last night but opted out due to being tired. I figured I could do it today after work but now that the song is down I can't give you any kind of real particular constructive criticism. From what I can remember it sounded as though you didn't do any kind of editing to your instruments which unless you were just testing out LSDJ for the first time isn't good practice for using the tracker. Chipmusic, to me anyways, is about pushing the boundaries of what these sound chips can do. Don't settle for default settings because for one they sound like garbage and two makes you sound like some generic "me too" Crystal Castles bullshit.
I didn't hear this in your song but for future reference, since I'm on the topic of sound, avoid any kind of real significant "video-gamey" sounds e.g. Mario jump sounds, coin collecting, stuff like that. Sparingly it can be cool but a lot of new musicians tend to exploit the shit out of this and I think it does a disservice to chip music and is mildly insulting. There's a nostalgia factor to it but most of us aren't here for the memories of yesteryear about playing video games. It's about the music (lame cliché.)
Your song was only 30 seconds long it is also the heart of why you got trolled here. Unless you're Anal Cunt or Agoraphobic Nosebleed (Altered State of America album) you aren't going to get away with putting out such short songs. On the trolling bit, the online chipmusic scene has seen plenty of trolls, most of the community just trolls the shit out of each other on a daily basis, so it's kind of hard to believe somebody when you post a 30 second song. Not only that but it included weird imagery so that was also a factor.
These points are my only real CC I can give. I can't remember the tune so I can't go into why it wasn't great on a musical level. Like what other people have said "try harder." Everyone sucks their first time out, don't get discouraged. Let this experience be motivation and inspiration to create truly great songs. Listen to other chip musicians, listen to lots of different music (even stuff you wouldn't normally, you'll get inspiration from weird places), get more familiar with the tracker, if you don't already have some kind of knowledge of music theory that will help but it's not necessary. Have fun and I hope to see more songs from you soon.